Bewerbung Au Pair, Korrekturlesen

Das Bewerbungsverfahren für Studienmöglichkeiten, Praktika und Jobs im Ausland unterscheidet sich von Land zu Land. Auf welche länderspezifischen Fallstricke besonders geachtet werden sollte, erfahrt ihr in dieser Rubrik.
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simi555
Beiträge: 1
Registriert: 09.05.2013, 22:18

Bewerbung Au Pair, Korrekturlesen

Beitrag von simi555 » 09.05.2013, 22:24

Könnte diesen Text jemand Korrekturlesen? Ich bin auch jedezeit für Verbesserungsvorschläge in Sachen Ausdruck offen :))







Dear host family,
My name is Maria, but most people call me Mimi. I'm from Austria, Wiener Neustadt, wich is near Vienna.
I live with my mom and dad, I have two older brothers and a older sister, who are all living on their own. My brothers are both married and are currently living in Villach with their familiy. They have kids who are 9, 6 and 5 years old. I'm taking care for them very often. My sister is studying at the moment. She wants to become a secondary modern school teacher.

At the moment I'm doing my high school graduation. So there is much to learn. :)
Which is why I'm really happy,when I see my nephews and niece. I meet them every Saturday, sometimes also on Sundays. We have much fun togheter. Sometimes I'm helping them with their homework, but most of the time we are outside, playing hide and seek or tag.
Also they love to dress up or paint and since I'm going to an art school, that's very relaxing for me :)

When the sun is shining I love to go for a walk with our dog. I love to be outside, especially with kids. Collecting stones, meet other children at the playground, building sandcastles or play soccer.

I love kids, their easy way is fascinating me the most. To be there for the them, to help them, to assist them is so exciting and a very fulfilling task. The noise of a laughing and giggling child is something wonderful.

I'm really looking forward to meet you and spend some exciting months with you.
I hope I made you curious about me. If so, I would be glad if you get in touch.
With many kind greetings, especially for to the children.
Mimi

Klassekassel1
Beiträge: 19
Registriert: 15.04.2013, 23:49

Beitrag von Klassekassel1 » 10.05.2013, 18:49

Hier mein verbesserter Brief:

PS: Bei den eingeklammerten Sachen kannst du selbst entscheiden ob du sie verwendest.

Dear host family,
My name is Maria, but most people call me Mimi. I live with my parents in (the town) "Wiener Neustadt", wich is located near Vienna in Austria.
I have two older brothers and one older sister. They are living on their own. My brothers are both married and are currently living in Villach with their own families. They have kids who are 9, 6 and 5 years old. I'm taking care for them very often. My sister is studying at the moment. She wants to become a secondary modern school teacher.

At the moment I'm doing my high school graduation. So there is much to learn. Smilie
That is the reason why I'm really happy, when I can see my nephews and niece. I meet them every Saturday, sometimes also on Sundays. We have much fun togheter. Sometimes I'm helping them with their homework, but most of the time we are outside, playing hide and seek or tag.
Also they love to dress up or paint and since I'm going to an art school, that's very relaxing for me Smilie ??? (was soll das heißen)

When the sun is shining I love to go for a walk with our dog. I love to be outside with kids too. Collecting stones, meet other children at the playground, building sandcastles or play soccer. ??? (was soll das heißen)

I love kids very much. Their easy way to live is the most fascinating thing by them. To be there for the them, to help them and to assist them is so exciting and a very fulfilling task. The noise of a laughing and giggling child is something wonderful.

I'm really looking forward to meet you and spend some exciting months with you.
I hope I made you curious about me. If so, I would be glad if you get in touch.
With many kind greetings, especially for to the children.
Mimi

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